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Originally posted by Mrsnetpro Mrsnetpro wrote:

Originally posted by Suave Suave wrote:

Originally posted by Mrsnetpro Mrsnetpro wrote:

I didn't want to deal with judges who make assumptions so I botched it and didn't submit.

Haha, someone who is always ahead of the curve!
I did a poor job with my response Cry. First round feedback included assumptions/preconceived notions that I got dinged for and for this round I liked my story enough that I didn't want to deal with hearing that a cardroom is only in a casino. There are cardrooms in houses, country clubs or anywhere someone wants to pitch a tent and with those prompts maybe it will lead somewhere.

I have one last screenplay round to get through Smile

 



I have learned over the years not to take anything the judges say to heart.
I have had them want to rewrite my story, though they liked the title. You 
have to remember they must write something for the feedback, and for the
most part they are no more a judge than what can be grabbed by putting
up an add on craigslist. The other judges are academics that feel the power,
lol. So, write your stories, post on the forum and reap what you can from 
that feedback, at least someone is reading your stories, that's a hoot, I have 
had 500 people read some of my stories on here. Way better than just my 
family and friends.
Pluss, you get to write to some pretty outlandish prompts that you would never
have thought of, much less actually written something about. I just look at
it all as fun. I have written a lot of stories that woulda never seen the light
of day.


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I don't know if this is exactly botched, but I fell in love with an idea that led me to write a story I really liked, but was really not in the right genre. Then I spent an entire day stubbornly trying to reconcile those two things in a way that didn't ruin what I liked best about the story.  No idea if I succeeded.

In the end, my goal is to become a better writer, not win a contest.  So if the judges don't think I hit the mark on this one, that's ok.  I can live with the choices I made here.  Beer
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Originally posted by GenieAZ GenieAZ wrote:

I don't know if this is exactly botched, but I fell in love with an idea that led me to write a story I really liked, but was really not in the right genre. Then I spent an entire day stubbornly trying to reconcile those two things in a way that didn't ruin what I liked best about the story.  No idea if I succeeded.

In the end, my goal is to become a better writer, not win a contest.  So if the judges don't think I hit the mark on this one, that's ok.  I can live with the choices I made here.  Beer


Perfectly said!
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Originally posted by GaleGirl GaleGirl wrote:

Originally posted by Maximum Dynamite Maximum Dynamite wrote:

Realized I used a word wrong in my story. I'd meant to go back and revisit, but ran out of time and forgot. 

I had a wife that "tousled" her husband's hair when she was only meant to be gently rubbing her fingers through it affectionately. I just couldn't think of a more concise way to say it. Felt like an idiot after I submitted and realized I just could have said "stroked." Ugh. Oh well!

My favorite college composition teacher created a maxim he called his first law of literacy. His name was Lawrence. What was Lawrence's first law of literacy? "When in doubt, cop out." He was a brilliant man--not like he was a no-nothing or something. I follow his law to this day and it has prevented me from making that mistake in these contests. Fortunately, I made many others. Like mentioning testicles in my last story. Too outre, per one judge. (Was that the right word?) Wink
I don't think there is anything "outre" about merely mentioning testicles. I guess it depends on the context! 

While I was searching up my own old stories in my email, I found one from someone I didn't know that I had apparently beta read in 2015 and she spent some words on horse statue testicles. It didn't bother me, but it did make me wonder why she included it in a story about a ballerina being forced to give up her baby. I kept trying to think about what it meant thematically. It was an excellent story, even with horse balls.
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Originally posted by Maximum Dynamite Maximum Dynamite wrote:

It was an excellent story, even with horse balls.

OK, but why am I now determined to write a story that replicates this feedback? Not specifically with horse balls, but same vibe. 
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Originally posted by NERdling NERdling wrote:

Originally posted by Maximum Dynamite Maximum Dynamite wrote:

It was an excellent story, even with horse balls.

OK, but why am I now determined to write a story that replicates this feedback? Not specifically with horse balls, but same vibe. 
I believe in you. Whichever animal's testicles you choose will make a great addition to your work.
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Maybe they will enjoy it biggly.
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I had Political Satire too!
And also couldn’t het it started till…. Sunday afternoon 
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Just reviewed my story before posting on the forum and discovered I transposed two lines of dialogue. Very annoyed with myself.

Is it worth contacting NYCM or am I right royally screwed?
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Originally posted by Suave Suave wrote:

Originally posted by Mrsnetpro Mrsnetpro wrote:

Originally posted by Suave Suave wrote:

Originally posted by Mrsnetpro Mrsnetpro wrote:

I didn't want to deal with judges who make assumptions so I botched it and didn't submit.

Haha, someone who is always ahead of the curve!
I did a poor job with my response Cry. First round feedback included assumptions/preconceived notions that I got dinged for and for this round I liked my story enough that I didn't want to deal with hearing that a cardroom is only in a casino. There are cardrooms in houses, country clubs or anywhere someone wants to pitch a tent and with those prompts maybe it will lead somewhere.

I have one last screenplay round to get through Smile
 

I have learned over the years not to take anything the judges say to heart.
I have had them want to rewrite my story, though they liked the title. You have to remember they must write something for the feedback, and for the most part they are no more a judge than what can be grabbed by putting up an add on craigslist. The other judges are academics that feel the power, lol. So, write your stories, post on the forum and reap what you can from that feedback, at least someone is reading your stories, that's a hoot, I have had 500 people read some of my stories on here. Way better than just my family and friends.
Pluss, you get to write to some pretty outlandish prompts that you would never have thought of, much less actually written something about. I just look at it all as fun. I have written a lot of stories that woulda never seen the light of day.


FWIW 
1. My cardroom isn't in a casino either. I found out a lot about illegal / semi-legal gambling while I was trying to get this written.

2. Agree with Suave. Without those prompts, this story would never exist. 

3. The feedback from the forums is at least as good as the feedback from the judges. I once wrote a thriller where my MC got text messages after she'd chucked her phone in the bin. None of the judges picked it up. The forum did.
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