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R1, G33, Action, "Runaway"

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    Posted: 14 May 2022 at 11:20am
Runaway

Her text breaks months of silence: “Dn worry . . . prophet chose me 4 wife.”
Gives my map another blue dot to chase.
I roll over the border by moonlight. Lethal powder dry.
Midday, I spot her. Still 14. Bonneted. Cowbell ‘round neck.
Footing to dusty shacks, I beg the sky she'll want saving.
Porcine prophet blocks my path. Brothers strapped. Sisters silent.
Her seedling voice, “Marriage . . . eternal commitment.”
“Brought your dowry.”
Three-gun chaperone to my rig.
Prophet shadow uncast, her chin dimples.
I pour brothers water, slice a powdery lemon. They stagger. I leave a dust storm, not my daughter.
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Congrats on a great story.  Very vivid and complete.  Good luck on round 2.
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Thank you for the kind words, fellow lemon-slicer!  I see both our stories involve an afternoon with guns in it (aside from the lemons and the committing).  Love the "twist" of humor in yours.  
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