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Post most moving to MF

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Topic: Post most moving to MF

Posted By: sgspeed
Subject: Post most moving to MF
Date Posted: 27 Jul 2021 at 2:16pm

Group 5 Drama injuring a knee a line

Posted in the wrong place!!

My story is here -

https://tinyurl.com/7zm2nhw3" rel="nofollow - Last Chance

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MF100 R1 https://forums.nycmidnight.com/topic64186_post688973.html#688973" rel="nofollow - The Peoples Temple
250 MF RD.2 https://tinyurl.com/2haej8xt" rel="nofollow - Quenched

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Posted By: NERdling
Date Posted: 27 Jul 2021 at 2:44pm

Hi!

You've posted in the general forum.

You should go here:

https://forums.nycmidnight.com/100word-microfiction-challenge-2021-review_forum77.html" rel="nofollow - https://forums.nycmidnight.com/100word-microfiction-challenge-2021-review_forum77.html

and make a new post. You can edit this post to remove the content (people generally put something like "ignore this")

If you've put a link in one of the master lists already, you should update with a link to your new post.

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https://tinyurl.com/fnl500" rel="nofollow - 500 Final
https://tinyurl.com/nycm5" rel="nofollow - Archive

Posted By: LRS
Date Posted: 27 Jul 2021 at 3:50pm

Alas, I am not well-versed at all in sportsball, so wholly unlikely to get the historic references. I do remember Joe Theismann's leg injury in 1985 (weirdly, was just talking with co-workers about it at lunch before seeing your story). Not sure if that Joe is the connection, though.

The pacing of this piece is immaculate -- and particularly poignant last line.

Repetition of line structure is great too:

"Twenty-three seconds left, down by eight."
"Thirteen seconds. Six yards."

NICE emphasis on urgency, that.

Posted By: Michael R. Evans
Date Posted: 27 Jul 2021 at 5:18pm

Hi groupmate,

I started with an idea for a lineman who hurts his knee. Glad I changed. Good to have variety in our group. You've written an exciting and straight-forward sports story complete with the glory of extreme physical sacrifice. (I'm not a college football fan, but I'll google your easter eggs later.) Maybe the story could have benefited from a couple of words about a defender nearly taking him down before the release to pump up the drama. But overall, a fun story for a sports fan like me to read. Good luck.

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http://bit.ly/4tDAL8T" rel="nofollow - 250 R2
https://bit.ly/amernino" rel="nofollow - 500 R1 (9th)
https://bit.ly/WhatRake" rel="nofollow - 100 R1 (7th)

Posted By: neilw
Date Posted: 28 Jul 2021 at 9:48am

Engaging story, quite screenplay-like, nice resolution. Can't really fault it tbh, I like the style, everything is in service of the story.

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https://forums.nycmidnight.com/topic42985_post446363.html#446363" rel="nofollow - C2 G5 "Truce" (drama)

https://forums.nycmidnight.com/topic41374_post426111.html#426111" rel="nofollow - C1 G5 "Driver" (sci-fi)

Posted By: smaps000
Date Posted: 29 Jul 2021 at 12:47pm

C2 G9 100 Word Microfiction -- Horror: Searching for a Pet, Immense.

Title: Codependency

Shadow has been luring me to the woods after dusk, his teeth gently grasping my robe, pulling me toward the treeline. A game we play -- my sweet puggle, who nuzzles my nose, and nestles behind my knees while we sleep.

Shadow needs me.

But tonight there is no Shadow, no sleep. My flashlight cuts golden lines through the damp haze. “Shadow, come!” My voice against the moonless night impresses the wolves who answer. Unseen, I hear Shadow's command. “It’s time. Time to die.”

My therapist calls it “post-COVID paranoia”. But she doesn’t understand.

The wolves are hungry.

They need us.

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Rosemarie