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Topic: Final Round Titles and Loglines
Posted By: steph9289
Subject: Final Round Titles and Loglines
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 12:22am
Let's see 'em!

If you had a particular genre in mind, list that here as well. I like to include the genres in the Master List!


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Posted By: manifestlynot
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 12:32am
Animal Instincts 

An emergency in the gorilla exhibit tests zookeeper Amy’s bond with her beloved friends.

Genre: Drama/Action Adventure?


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Posted By: JeffreyHowe
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 12:37am
Babi Cuts Loose

The oldest resident of the world's oldest zoo realizes what's in
store for his neighbor -- and decides it's time to go.

Historical Comedy (Animated) Evil Smile


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 12:39am
PARADISE
As keeper of the universe’s largest zoo, Able Godfrey’s priority is discovering new creatures throughout the galaxies. He could never have anticipated the actions of one hyperactive child, or the astonishing results of a chance encounter between two species from opposite ends of the universe.

Genre I went with: Sci-Fi


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Posted By: montmorency
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 12:44am
Originally posted by T.E. Bradford T.E. Bradford wrote:

PARADISE
As keeper of the universe’s largest zoo, Able Godfrey’s priority is discovering new creatures throughout the galaxies. He could never have anticipated the actions of one hyperactive child, or the astonishing results of a chance encounter between two species from opposite ends of the universe.

Genre I went with: Sci-Fi

Wow I can't believe you got all that into 5 pages!  Sounds great!


Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 12:49am
Originally posted by montmorency montmorency wrote:

Wow I can't believe you got all that into 5 pages!  Sounds great!

:D Thanks! After editing all day I needed that pick-me-up. LOL
Hopefully I did the idea justice. I definitely had a lot of trimming to do.
KUDOS to my FABULOUS beta reader. YOU know who you are!!! Big smile


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 12:51am
The Guests 

When a couple visit a resort and zoo on a Greek island with their accident-prone toddler, they really do get away from it all. Just not in the way they were expecting.

Genre I was going for: Suspense/Horror
Genre I ended up with: Not sure - hopefully one/both of the above...!


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Posted By: NYCNewbie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 1:17am
Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

The Guests

When a couple visit a resort and zoo on a Greek island with their accident-prone toddler, they really do get away from it all. Just not in the way they were expecting.

Genre I was going for: Suspense/Horror
Genre I ended up with: Not sure - hopefully one/both of the above...!


Sounds like you're describing your current holiday Sarah? Good Luck....

P x

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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 1:34am
Originally posted by NYCNewbie NYCNewbie wrote:

Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

The Guests

When a couple visit a resort and zoo on a Greek island with their accident-prone toddler, they really do get away from it all. Just not in the way they were expecting.

Genre I was going for: Suspense/Horror
Genre I ended up with: Not sure - hopefully one/both of the above...!


Sounds like you're describing your current holiday Sarah? Good Luck....

P x

Lol! It has definitely inspired a darker take on the prompts... I don't think I'll be brave enough to post it, didn't have time to get your invaluable beta support (I was being 'antisocial' so had to be super quick) and I'm not happy with it... :(


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Posted By: Vernacula
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 1:43am

A WONDERFUL WORLD
Mistakes, accidents, and poor judgment are all part of human nature.
Maybe they don't have to be.



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Posted By: Vernacula
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 1:48am
Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

The Guests 

When a couple visit a resort and zoo on a Greek island with their accident-prone toddler, they really do get away from it all. Just not in the way they were expecting.

Genre I was going for: Suspense/Horror
Genre I ended up with: Not sure - hopefully one/both of the above...!


I am so beatdown exhausted right now that I read the first line as: When a couple visit a resort and zoo with their ANCIENT TODDLER...

And it sounded super cool! Your actual idea sounds wonderful, too. I do hope you post it.






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Posted By: haole
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 2:24am
Extraction of the Zookeeper

Logline: Years after a global calamity kills most of the planet, a man investigates tales of a woman who finds and keeps animals. 



Posted By: Tim G
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 2:33am

The Origin of The Origin Of Species

Social circumstance and clumsiness have prevented the young Charles Darwin from pursuing his dreams.
But tonight, humanity's 
future will be inspired by its past.

Genre: Historical Fiction Comedy Drama


I'm really looking forward to reading all these. Kudos to everyone who's managed to work around the 'accident prone' prompt to deliver something 'straight'. I just couldn't!



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Posted By: Vernacula
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 2:42am
Originally posted by haole haole wrote:

Extraction of the Zookeeper

Logline: Years after a global calamity kills most of the planet, a man investigates tales of a woman who finds and keeps animals. 



This sounds so cool!


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Posted By: Vernacula
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 3:05am
Originally posted by Tim G Tim G wrote:

The Origin of The Origin Of Species

Social circumstance and clumsiness have prevented the young Charles Darwin from pursuing his dreams.
But tonight, humanity's 
future will be inspired by its past.

Genre: Historical Fiction Comedy Drama


I'm really looking forward to reading all these. Kudos to everyone who's managed to work around the 'accident prone' prompt to deliver something 'straight'. I just couldn't!



I love that genre! ;-)

This sounds awesome. Can't wait to read it.

Can't wait to read all of them!


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Posted By: VitruvianFilms
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 3:06am
Humans are Monsters

A human escapes from a rare zoological enclosure, and the alien zookeepers must track her down.  

Sci-fi/comedy, sort of intended it to be animated


Posted By: alexdsut
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 4:23am
Nula

A lifelong bond is formed between a deaf girl and the gorilla who saved her life.

Genre: Drama

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These all sound terrific! I made it a personal goal not to make this comedy as it seemed that's exactly what the prompts wanted, and I'll be damned if I'm gonna conform :D


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Posted By: haole
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 9:08am
Originally posted by alexdsut alexdsut wrote:

These all sound terrific! I made it a personal goal not to make this comedy as it seemed that's exactly what the prompts wanted, and I'll be damned if I'm gonna conform :D

Haha, yep. I rebelled against the comedy as well and went super dark with mine.


Posted By: JeffreyHowe
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 10:02am
Originally posted by alexdsut alexdsut wrote:

Nula

A lifelong bond is formed between a deaf girl and the gorilla who saved her life.

Genre: Drama

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These all sound terrific! I made it a personal goal not to make this comedy as it seemed that's exactly what the prompts wanted, and I'll be damned if I'm gonna conform :D

See, I knew people would rebel against obviously comic prompts, so I rebelled against the rebellion and went funny. LOL


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 10:40am
Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

The Guests 

When a couple visit a resort and zoo on a Greek island with their accident-prone toddler, they really do get away from it all. Just not in the way they were expecting.

Genre I was going for: Suspense/Horror
Genre I ended up with: Not sure - hopefully one/both of the above...!

Ooooh, this sounds intriguing! Especially since you note going for suspense/horror! Can't wait to read. :)


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 10:42am
Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:


A WONDERFUL WORLD
Mistakes, accidents, and poor judgment are all part of human nature.
Maybe they don't have to be.


You always manage to intrigue me with your loglines. This one is another great example. What genre did you end up going with? I'm bouncing on my feet hoping this goes as sci-fi as it sounds. :D


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 10:44am
Originally posted by haole haole wrote:

Extraction of the Zookeeper

Logline: Years after a global calamity kills most of the planet, a man investigates tales of a woman who finds and keeps animals. 


Ooooo, I like the sound of this one, too! So many great ideas!!! :)
I do hope you post it. I was considering going post-apocalyptic and this one seems to be in that general direction, which I'm a huge fan of reading. Will keep eyes out for it if you post.
--Tracy


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 10:47am
Originally posted by Tim G Tim G wrote:

The Origin of The Origin Of Species

Social circumstance and clumsiness have prevented the young Charles Darwin from pursuing his dreams.
But tonight, humanity's 
future will be inspired by its past.

Genre: Historical Fiction Comedy Drama


I'm really looking forward to reading all these. Kudos to everyone who's managed to work around the 'accident prone' prompt to deliver something 'straight'. I just couldn't!


Your genre blend alone has me dying to read it, Tim. I'm trying to think of a good abbreviation for this combo. HicFicComeDra? LOL  Seriously, you make me wish I *hadn't* gone straight with mine. Darn you. ::shaking fist and laughing::

--Tracy


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 10:50am
Originally posted by VitruvianFilms VitruvianFilms wrote:

Humans are Monsters

A human escapes from a rare zoological enclosure, and the alien zookeepers must track her down.  

Sci-fi/comedy, sort of intended it to be animated

Niiiiiiice!

I'm hogging up space on this thread replying to everyone, but darn it, they're all so dang good! Yours makes me think of Planet of the Apes, but in the coolest possible way. I hope you post it.

--Tracy


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 10:58am
Originally posted by alexdsut alexdsut wrote:

Nula

A lifelong bond is formed between a deaf girl and the gorilla who saved her life.

Genre: Drama

Wow Alex - just the logline feels so dramatic. If the story follows suit, you had nothing to worry about. I think we all felt that exhausted, near tears, ready to collapse reaction by midnight (if not sooner). I can't wait to read this.

--Tracy (former/kinda still heat mate). ;-)


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Posted By: manifestlynot
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 11:09am
Originally posted by alexdsut alexdsut wrote:

Nula

A lifelong bond is formed between a deaf girl and the gorilla who saved her life.

Genre: Drama

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These all sound terrific! I made it a personal goal not to make this comedy as it seemed that's exactly what the prompts wanted, and I'll be damned if I'm gonna conform :D

We both went the gorilla route, haha! Can’t wait to read!


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Posted By: funkadillo
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 1:01pm
Stay Behind The Bars

When a bumbling zoologist interns at a new job, he must earn the respect of a no-nonsense boss who is convinced that he’s too soft to handle the crushing frenzy of feeding time.

Genre: Comedy(??) I'm... not actually sure, it kinda got away from me...

So many of these loglines sound great! I can't wait to read such varied takes on the prompts. This round was the most difficult for me by far. Not only the tight deadline, but that strict page limit fought me over every unnecessary word and joke I wanted to cram in there.




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Posted By: montmorency
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 1:53pm
Title: Animal Magnetism

A late-night talk show host reevaluates his belief in curses when a supermodel brings bad luck to a taping. If only cheetahs weren't booked for the same show...

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Genre: Comedy 

The title is lame - it really doesn't have anything to do with the story - but after writing and editing all day I just didn't have it left in me to come up with something better!


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Posted By: The Fnord
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 2:25pm
Eugene

Romantic Comedy

Eugene can't work up the courage to speak to his crush. Thankfully, his proclivity for getting injured gives him plenty of second chances.
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We got lukewarm reactions during the beta phase so we had to scramble last night. Looking forward to hearing feedback.

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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 3:26pm
Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:


A WONDERFUL WORLD
Mistakes, accidents, and poor judgment are all part of human nature.
Maybe they don't have to be.


I'm very intrigued by this - it's such a cool premise. It's sounding like you're opening up a really interesting debate about random free will vs. intelligent control, and which is ultimately the more destructive/constructive. 

Can't wait to read it anyway!


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 3:31pm
Originally posted by T.E. Bradford T.E. Bradford wrote:

PARADISE
As keeper of the universe’s largest zoo, Able Godfrey’s priority is discovering new creatures throughout the galaxies. He could never have anticipated the actions of one hyperactive child, or the astonishing results of a chance encounter between two species from opposite ends of the universe.

Genre I went with: Sci-Fi

Love this - and it has so much mileage. After this and our requisite five pages, it seems like you could take this premise in so many different directions/universes and into many more pages moving forward. 

Most importantly, I really need to know what happened as a result of that chance encounter! 


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 3:39pm
Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:

Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

The Guests 

When a couple visit a resort and zoo on a Greek island with their accident-prone toddler, they really do get away from it all. Just not in the way they were expecting.

Genre I was going for: Suspense/Horror
Genre I ended up with: Not sure - hopefully one/both of the above...!


I am so beatdown exhausted right now that I read the first line as: When a couple visit a resort and zoo with their ANCIENT TODDLER...

And it sounded super cool! Your actual idea sounds wonderful, too. I do hope you post it.




Lol! I'm not sure there's much that would save what I wrote, but an ancient toddler might have! :)

I've seen your name on the forums so it's nice to finally say a virtual hello! 

I'm worried about posting it. It's rushed. It's just not good. But then I'm thinking I'm here to learn and the people on the forums are always really kind, very constructive and super helpful and for me, there is no better way to learn than from everyone else here. So when the time comes to post, I'm going to try and be brave...



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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 3:44pm
I absolutely love this already! Very nicely done with turning the tables and making the human the zoo animal.

Am currently having a 'wish I'd thought of this' moment!


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 4:01pm
Originally posted by funkadillo funkadillo wrote:

Stay Behind The Bars

When a bumbling zoologist interns at a new job, he must earn the respect of a no-nonsense boss who is convinced that he’s too soft to handle the crushing frenzy of feeding time.

Genre: Comedy(??) I'm... not actually sure, it kinda got away from me...

So many of these loglines sound great! I can't wait to read such varied takes on the prompts. This round was the most difficult for me by far. Not only the tight deadline, but that strict page limit fought me over every unnecessary word and joke I wanted to cram in there.



Your title and logline alone have cheered me up big time and made me smile - this script sounds right up my street! I'm already picturing the jokes and mayhem that will go on and I can't wait to read it. :)




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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 4:08pm
Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

Originally posted by T.E. Bradford T.E. Bradford wrote:

PARADISE
Love this - and it has so much mileage. After this and our requisite five pages, it seems like you could take this premise in so many different directions/universes and into many more pages moving forward. 

Most importantly, I really need to know what happened as a result of that chance encounter! 

Thanks Miss Moosie. :)
Hopefully I did the logline justice. It was really hard to find the balance of having enough lead-in to make the whole thing make sense, yet leaving enough room to do "the event" justice. Fingers crossed everyone won't read this and wish they'd stopped with the logline. LOL
Dang, my writer insecurity is showing. ;-)


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 4:09pm
Originally posted by VitruvianFilms VitruvianFilms wrote:

Humans are Monsters

A human escapes from a rare zoological enclosure, and the alien zookeepers must track her down.  

Sci-fi/comedy, sort of intended it to be animated

Oops - this is me proving that Wacko (yet again) I'm rubbish at responding to posts let alone posting my own stuff. The message I posted earlier (below) was about your logline... 
 

I absolutely love this already! Very nicely done with turning the tables and making the human the zoo animal.

Am currently having a 'wish I'd thought of this' moment!


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 4:27pm
Originally posted by T.E. Bradford T.E. Bradford wrote:

Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

Originally posted by T.E. Bradford T.E. Bradford wrote:

PARADISE
Love this - and it has so much mileage. After this and our requisite five pages, it seems like you could take this premise in so many different directions/universes and into many more pages moving forward. 

Most importantly, I really need to know what happened as a result of that chance encounter! 

Thanks Miss Moosie. :)
Hopefully I did the logline justice. It was really hard to find the balance of having enough lead-in to make the whole thing make sense, yet leaving enough room to do "the event" justice. Fingers crossed everyone won't read this and wish they'd stopped with the logline. LOL
Dang, my writer insecurity is showing. ;-)

Hello! 

I'm sure your intriguing logline is definitely going to be reflective of your overall script - I need to know what happens!! And it seems like you've totally opened up all sorts of possibilities if you want to go beyond five pages.

PS: I get major anxiety on the forums. I'm scared to post. (I also generally need help to post because I'm rubbish at posting.) I then can't bear to look after I've posted as I always hate everything I've done. When I finally brace myself to look, everyone is so nice constructive and helpful that I wish I'd looked sooner and could throw myself into it all more...! Grrr! 

Anyway, you've taken these (a bit tricky to say the least) prompts and I'm really looking forward to reading your script!! 



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Posted By: Vernacula
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 5:02pm
Originally posted by T.E. Bradford T.E. Bradford wrote:

Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:


A WONDERFUL WORLD
Mistakes, accidents, and poor judgment are all part of human nature.
Maybe they don't have to be.


You always manage to intrigue me with your loglines. This one is another great example. What genre did you end up going with? I'm bouncing on my feet hoping this goes as sci-fi as it sounds. :D


Thank you so much for saying! I put a little more thought into this one and got a bit of help. It initially had a very different title, and the logline was a quote! We should have a thread for discarded titles and tags, haha. My genre was: open. Like everyone! Evil Smile LOL (Email me if you want and I'll spill.)

All of these sound so freaking good!


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Posted By: Vernacula
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 5:05pm
Originally posted by manifestlynot manifestlynot wrote:

Originally posted by alexdsut alexdsut wrote:

Nula

A lifelong bond is formed between a deaf girl and the gorilla who saved her life.

Genre: Drama

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These all sound terrific! I made it a personal goal not to make this comedy as it seemed that's exactly what the prompts wanted, and I'll be damned if I'm gonna conform :D

We both went the gorilla route, haha! Can’t wait to read!


I almost went there, too! It was my number one choice, but I couldn't get it sorted between my head and the page. Broke my heart. So I'm obviously super excited to read these!


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Posted By: Vernacula
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 5:11pm
Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:


A WONDERFUL WORLD
Mistakes, accidents, and poor judgment are all part of human nature.
Maybe they don't have to be.


I'm very intrigued by this - it's such a cool premise. It's sounding like you're opening up a really interesting debate about random free will vs. intelligent control, and which is ultimately the more destructive/constructive. 

Can't wait to read it anyway!


Thank you! There is a little bit of this idea in there, but you've made it sound way cooler than it actually is. I really don't know how to feel about this one.


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Posted By: Vernacula
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 5:24pm
Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:


Lol! I'm not sure there's much that would save what I wrote, but an ancient toddler might have! :)

I've seen your name on the forums so it's nice to finally say a virtual hello! 

I'm worried about posting it. It's rushed. It's just not good. But then I'm thinking I'm here to learn and the people on the forums are always really kind, very constructive and super helpful and for me, there is no better way to learn than from everyone else here. So when the time comes to post, I'm going to try and be brave...



Good to say hi back! ;-) I hear you on the rushed thing, and thinking something is no good. I was so scared to post my most recent flash piece, and I got some forum feedback yesterday that actually made me tear up. (I'm a sentimental fool.) If you do post, I'm in. We got this! Heart


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 5:49pm
Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:

Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:


Lol! I'm not sure there's much that would save what I wrote, but an ancient toddler might have! :)

I've seen your name on the forums so it's nice to finally say a virtual hello! 

I'm worried about posting it. It's rushed. It's just not good. But then I'm thinking I'm here to learn and the people on the forums are always really kind, very constructive and super helpful and for me, there is no better way to learn than from everyone else here. So when the time comes to post, I'm going to try and be brave...



Good to say hi back! ;-) I hear you on the rushed thing, and thinking something is no good. I was so scared to post my most recent flash piece, and I got some forum feedback yesterday that actually made me tear up. (I'm a sentimental fool.) If you do post, I'm in. We got this! Heart

I've just realised you wrote LOVE-STUCK! I read all the scripts in your category as I loved your group's prompts, but yours has stayed in my mind as it was just so beautifully written and hit every emotion so perfectly. It was a brilliant title too. 


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Posted By: Vernacula
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 6:30pm
Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:

Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:


Lol! I'm not sure there's much that would save what I wrote, but an ancient toddler might have! :)

I've seen your name on the forums so it's nice to finally say a virtual hello! 

I'm worried about posting it. It's rushed. It's just not good. But then I'm thinking I'm here to learn and the people on the forums are always really kind, very constructive and super helpful and for me, there is no better way to learn than from everyone else here. So when the time comes to post, I'm going to try and be brave...



Good to say hi back! ;-) I hear you on the rushed thing, and thinking something is no good. I was so scared to post my most recent flash piece, and I got some forum feedback yesterday that actually made me tear up. (I'm a sentimental fool.) If you do post, I'm in. We got this! Heart

I've just realised you wrote LOVE-STUCK! I read all the scripts in your category as I loved your group's prompts, but yours has stayed in my mind as it was just so beautifully written and hit every emotion so perfectly. It was a brilliant title too. 


Wow, thank you! I was so excited to get romantic comedy, and hopefully that came through. I don't really watch the genre, but it seemed like it would be fun to write. And it was!


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 7:06pm
Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:

Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:

Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:


Lol! I'm not sure there's much that would save what I wrote, but an ancient toddler might have! :)

I've seen your name on the forums so it's nice to finally say a virtual hello! 

I'm worried about posting it. It's rushed. It's just not good. But then I'm thinking I'm here to learn and the people on the forums are always really kind, very constructive and super helpful and for me, there is no better way to learn than from everyone else here. So when the time comes to post, I'm going to try and be brave...



Good to say hi back! ;-) I hear you on the rushed thing, and thinking something is no good. I was so scared to post my most recent flash piece, and I got some forum feedback yesterday that actually made me tear up. (I'm a sentimental fool.) If you do post, I'm in. We got this! Heart

I've just realised you wrote LOVE-STUCK! I read all the scripts in your category as I loved your group's prompts, but yours has stayed in my mind as it was just so beautifully written and hit every emotion so perfectly. It was a brilliant title too. 


Wow, thank you! I was so excited to get romantic comedy, and hopefully that came through. I don't really watch the genre, but it seemed like it would be fun to write. And it was!

It was heartfelt and funny, tinged with sadness but in an affirmative, positive way - and your fantastic sense of humour shone through big time. 




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Posted By: tedsturge
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 8:38pm

PATHS OF PROGRESS


A U.S. Navy Captain faces a Senate tribunal 

in the aftermath of a tragic accident at a 

nuclear research facility. The cause of the

accident may be more monstrous than she lets on.




Reeeeeeeeally stretched the definition of a "zookeeeper". Good luck to everyone, I can't wait to read your scripts!



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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 9:06pm
Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

I'm sure your intriguing logline is definitely going to be reflective of your overall script - I need to know what happens!! And it seems like you've totally opened up all sorts of possibilities if you want to go beyond five pages.

PS: I get major anxiety on the forums. I'm scared to post. (I also generally need help to post because I'm rubbish at posting.) I then can't bear to look after I've posted as I always hate everything I've done. When I finally brace myself to look, everyone is so nice constructive and helpful that I wish I'd looked sooner and could throw myself into it all more...! Grrr! 

Anyway, you've taken these (a bit tricky to say the least) prompts and I'm really looking forward to reading your script!! 


Hopefully that's the case. :) I think we all feel the nerves about exposing ourselves, but yes, everyone is so super helpful and nice. It really makes a difference. And doing these NYCM competitions has helped me get SO much stronger at loglines, finding out what kind of story resonates most with readers, writing on deadlines and so many other good things. It's like therapy for writers. :D

The nice thing is, with only 60 of us left in final round, I'm thinking I can probably manage to read almost everyone's work who posts, which is very cool. Especially with all the amazing sounding stuff everyone came up with. I can't wait.


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 9:10pm
Originally posted by Vernacula Vernacula wrote:

Thank you so much for saying! I put a little more thought into this one and got a bit of help. It initially had a very different title, and the logline was a quote! We should have a thread for discarded titles and tags, haha. My genre was: open. Like everyone! Evil Smile LOL (Email me if you want and I'll spill.)

All of these sound so freaking good!

I love the idea of a thread for unused loglines!!! It's funny how much this competition has helped me develop better blurb skills.

And I would definitely email you, but now that I know it's kind of a secret, I think I'll wait and be surprised. Makes me that much more intrigued. :D I can't wait to see what you've done. Seriously - I always enjoy reading your work. You have a great writing voice, and one that really resonates with me as a reader. And not just because we share the same name (although ... cool!). LOL


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 9:13pm
Originally posted by tedsturge tedsturge wrote:

PATHS OF PROGRESS


A U.S. Navy Captain faces a Senate tribunal 

in the aftermath of a tragic accident at a 

nuclear research facility. The cause of the

accident may be more monstrous than she lets on.




Reeeeeeeeally stretched the definition of a "zookeeeper". Good luck to everyone, I can't wait to read your scripts!


Ooooo, another one I can't wait to read! I do hope you're going to post it. The nuclear accident aspect has me dying to find out what happened, and how the monstrous angle plays in. Nice job hooking me! :)

Hopefully the judges will be more flexible on the stretching of the prompts for finals. I recall reading a previous year's winner and thinking they stretched the topic quite a bit, and that the judges must have liked it because... well, it won. LOL

Okay, moving on to chomping at the bit for green light to post, because I really really want to read all of these!!!


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 9:21pm
I'm gradually getting braver. 

I value the feedback I get from everyone here so much. Then I feel guilty as my feedback is a bit lame. I get great insights but 

Note to self: toughen up!!!


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Posted By: MissMoosie
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 9:25pm
@TedSturge

I love that you stretched the zoo keeper prompt - and sounds like you took it just so far without neglecting the prompt.

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Posted By: Mrpenhead
Date Posted: 21 Jul 2019 at 11:08pm
All Creatures Great and Small

A timid zoo keeper worries about a new arrival to her zoo filled with mythological creatures.

Almost had a major snafu, forgot New York is an hour ahead of Dallas.  I was sweating!  Lol

Action/comedy, I would call it.   What was the count of writers for the final round?


Posted By: Tim G
Date Posted: 22 Jul 2019 at 2:59am
Originally posted by Mrpenhead Mrpenhead wrote:

What was the count of writers for the final round?

Well there’s fifty of us in total but the best part is 14 so far have posted here which suggests we will have at least that many to read on the forums; a record number from my own experience.

Don’t be afraid or anxious MissMoosie. You’re in the final for a reason!


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Posted By: Tim G
Date Posted: 22 Jul 2019 at 3:01am
Originally posted by MissMoosie MissMoosie wrote:

It was heartfelt and funny, tinged with sadness but in an affirmative, positive way - and your fantastic sense of humour shone through big time. 

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Posted By: JeffreyHowe
Date Posted: 22 Jul 2019 at 10:43am
I am happy to say I'm NOT currently reading for a contest or anything for once and will be able to look at more entries. Party

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Posted By: haole
Date Posted: 22 Jul 2019 at 11:33am
There's actually 60 in total

And I can't wait to read as many of them as I can!


Posted By: Goonie
Date Posted: 22 Jul 2019 at 3:41pm
The Spectral Zoo
An autistic boy's make-believe menagerie brings his family back to reality.


This one kicked my tail. The prompts were so leading in a comedic direction (as many of you pointed out) so I fought it and did something I don't normally do: went with Drama.  

Yes, Drama.

I'm an Action / Horror / Thriller kinda' guy, so this was against type for me. The zoo is pretend, and the autistic child is the zookeeper.  Spectral relates to the Autism Spectrum AND means phantom / vanish / invisible.

Finished at 11:30p -- the closest I've ever come. First draft was 6 pages (I write heavy) and it took a lot to eviscerate it down to 5.  Those cuts hurt, but I still think it works OK.  I suppose we'll see!


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Posted By: T.E. Bradford
Date Posted: 22 Jul 2019 at 4:46pm
Originally posted by Goonie Goonie wrote:

The Spectral Zoo
An autistic boy's make-believe menagerie brings his family back to reality.

Finished at 11:30p -- the closest I've ever come. First draft was 6 pages (I write heavy) and it took a lot to eviscerate it down to 5.  Those cuts hurt, but I still think it works OK.  I suppose we'll see!

Dang! That sounds really good, and a heart-grabber to boot.

I hear you about the cuts hurting. Mine was almost 7 pages after first draft. UGH. <:- )


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Posted By: kaitlarson
Date Posted: 04 Aug 2019 at 9:11pm
THE WOLVES ARE OUT
While having a surprise sleepover in the tunnels under a zoo, a young girl breaks the only rule of the night: don't get caught.

Genre: family drama



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