Introducing character
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Topic: Introducing character
Posted By: Suave
Subject: Introducing character
Date Posted: 13 Apr 2019 at 10:23pm
If someone is to be introduced as Mr. Smith and is also known as Father by others, how do I do that in introducing him? Any help will be appreciated!
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Posted By: Random
Date Posted: 13 Apr 2019 at 10:37pm
Suave wrote:
If someone is to be introduced as Mr. Smith and is also known as Father by others, how do I do that in introducing him? Any help will be appreciated!
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This is my father, Mr. Smith. He's been watching you for a long...time...it seems this character has been given...two lives...
If you start with Father it would seem mister follows, otherwise start with mister and make the Father a reveal later. I'm not convinced there's a right or wrong, just sequence and making sure the reader knows we're talking about the same person.
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Posted By: Suave
Date Posted: 13 Apr 2019 at 10:44pm
I was thinking: Mr Smith (father, 80')
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Posted By: Random
Date Posted: 13 Apr 2019 at 10:46pm
Suave wrote:
I was thinking: Mr Smith (Grandfather 80')
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Works. Make the rest a reveal when it matters.
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Posted By: Suave
Date Posted: 13 Apr 2019 at 10:53pm
Random wrote:
Suave wrote:
I was thinking: Mr Smith (Grandfather 80')
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Works. Make the rest a reveal when it matters.
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Thanks, I think that will get the point across, though when he is talking to his son/daughter I wonder if I should label him Mr. Smith or Father in the heading above the conversation? Perhaps if I introduce him as, FATHER (Mr. Smith, 80') as I will be using the father far more often and it gives the conversation a homey feel.
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Posted By: Random
Date Posted: 13 Apr 2019 at 11:24pm
Suave wrote:
Random wrote:
Suave wrote:
I was thinking: Mr Smith (Grandfather 80')
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Works. Make the rest a reveal when it matters.
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Thanks, I think that will get the point across, though when he is talking to his son/daughter I wonder if I should label him Mr. Smith or Father in the heading above the conversation? Perhaps if I introduce him as, FATHER (Mr. Smith, 80') as I will be using the father far more often and it gives the conversation a homey feel.
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What if Mr. Smith wears a priest's collar and a skirt (cassock, kilt, whatever). Show he's a Father, or waste a few words of dialog. So happy you've taken over the parish, Father.
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Posted By: Suave
Date Posted: 13 Apr 2019 at 11:28pm
Random wrote:
Suave wrote:
Random wrote:
Suave wrote:
I was thinking: Mr Smith (Grandfather 80')
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Works. Make the rest a reveal when it matters.
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Thanks, I think that will get the point across, though when he is talking to his son/daughter I wonder if I should label him Mr. Smith or Father in the heading above the conversation? Perhaps if I introduce him as, FATHER (Mr. Smith, 80') as I will be using the father far more often and it gives the conversation a homey feel.
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What if Mr. Smith wears a priest's collar and a skirt (cassock, kilt, whatever). Show he's a Father, or waste a few words of dialog. So happy you've taken over the parish, Father.
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Me thinks you be getting a little too far a field for me now . . .
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Posted By: Random
Date Posted: 13 Apr 2019 at 11:55pm
Suave wrote:
Random wrote:
Suave wrote:
Random wrote:
Suave wrote:
I was thinking: Mr Smith (Grandfather 80')
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Works. Make the rest a reveal when it matters.
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Thanks, I think that will get the point across, though when he is talking to his son/daughter I wonder if I should label him Mr. Smith or Father in the heading above the conversation? Perhaps if I introduce him as, FATHER (Mr. Smith, 80') as I will be using the father far more often and it gives the conversation a homey feel.
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What if Mr. Smith wears a priest's collar and a skirt (cassock, kilt, whatever). Show he's a Father, or waste a few words of dialog. So happy you've taken over the parish, Father.
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Me thinks you be getting a little too far a field for me now . . .
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If I were any farther afield right now I would be in a completely different contest. I thought 'Alien' was a comedy, and they give me horror? I suppose I should go read some entries.
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Posted By: ChristiLB
Date Posted: 14 Apr 2019 at 3:28am
Suave wrote:
Random wrote:
Suave wrote:
I was thinking: Mr Smith (Grandfather 80')
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Works. Make the rest a reveal when it matters.
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Thanks, I think that will get the point across, though when he is talking to his son/daughter I wonder if I should label him Mr. Smith or Father in the heading above the conversation? Perhaps if I introduce him as, FATHER (Mr. Smith, 80') as I will be using the father far more often and it gives the conversation a homey feel.
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I’ve read screenplays where both titles are written above dialogue (FATHER/MR. SMITH) It probably doesn’t matter too much unless you have more than 1 father in your script.
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