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Post Options Post Options   Thanks (0) Thanks(0)   Quote catrad Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 05 Aug 2018 at 11:00pm
RebRas- I followed your link from here to your entry Tilting at Turbines.  It took me to your story but not to your forum post, I tried to find it but couldn't.  If you're not getting feedback- that might be why.  You might want to fix it so your link goes to your forum post. 

Anyway- you nailed the story.  Great use of the prompts.  Some really beautiful lines.  You developed your MC nicely.  I love paragraph three about motives being like pointillism- then the splashes of color drawn from her life.  Great metaphor.  Great passion in understanding the psyche of the wife.  A person just worn down by living a life that falls short.  Well done. 
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Originally posted by catrad catrad wrote:

RebRas- I followed your link from here to your entry Tilting at Turbines.  It took me to your story but not to your forum post, I tried to find it but couldn't.  If you're not getting feedback- that might be why.  You might want to fix it so your link goes to your forum post. 

Anyway- you nailed the story.  Great use of the prompts.  Some really beautiful lines.  You developed your MC nicely.  I love paragraph three about motives being like pointillism- then the splashes of color drawn from her life.  Great metaphor.  Great passion in understanding the psyche of the wife.  A person just worn down by living a life that falls short.  Well done. 


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FFC 2018 / Heat 69 / suspense / wind farm / chewing gum


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project for the weekend.

Group 32.
Comedy at a newly constructed house with a parking meter.

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Comedy. Newly constructed house. Parking meter.

Malicious Compliance


David Brown doesn’t know what he’s getting into when he buys a house in Green Valley. Governed by a tyrannical homeowners association led by the pedantic Agnes Simon, David fights for what’s right—by playing by the rules.

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I came soooo close to not attempting this because it was so far out of my comfort zone, but I'm glad I did. While comedy writing will probably never be my chosen genre, this made me feel a lot less scared about getting a comedic story in round 2. Smile


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RebRas- That was great.  That's actually the theme of one of my books (A neighbor being pestered about code violations who finds ways to circumvent the rules).  I hadn't thought of it for this piece.  I'm still working at it. As in haven't technically written anything down just yet... 
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Here goes, rather short. Comedy/newly constructed house/parking meter
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