Judge 1807!

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   When I saw the "dreaded" 1807, I was nervous.  However, I found that feedback to be the best that I've ever had.  The positive was very specific, which I appreciate, and the negative I found very helpful.  He was right, 100%.
{1807}  Extremely unique story written in a fascinating metafictional mode. I love the form and style of the storytelling. The choice of a second-person narrator is functional, playful, and amusing. The prose is masterful and your attention to detail is formidable. It feels like you had a great deal of fun crafting this piece. Extra points for lively, inventive use of form and for your superb implementation of the allergic prompt.

1807}  As formally impressive as this story inarguably is, the content itself feels wispy and thin. I'm not 100% positive what is exactly happening in this story, and I think the form you've chosen, at times, fights against the clarity of the narrative. Has the form slightly overcomplicated a simple storyline?  

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angelagilbert Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List NYC Midnight Addict Joined: 21 Jan 2017 Location: Maine Status: Offline Points: 824	Post Options Post Reply Quote angelagilbert Report Post Thanks(0) Quote Reply Topic: Judge 1807! Posted: 29 Mar 2018 at 9:33am
	When I saw the "dreaded" 1807, I was nervous. However, I found that feedback to be the best that I've ever had. The positive was very specific, which I appreciate, and the negative I found very helpful. He was right, 100%. {1807} Extremely unique story written in a fascinating metafictional mode. I love the form and style of the storytelling. The choice of a second-person narrator is functional, playful, and amusing. The prose is masterful and your attention to detail is formidable. It feels like you had a great deal of fun crafting this piece. Extra points for lively, inventive use of form and for your superb implementation of the allergic prompt. 1807} As formally impressive as this story inarguably is, the content itself feels wispy and thin. I'm not 100% positive what is exactly happening in this story, and I think the form you've chosen, at times, fights against the clarity of the narrative. Has the form slightly overcomplicated a simple storyline?
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