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    Posted: 27 Jun 2022 at 11:18am

Wondering if this is allowed on this forum? I wrote a random micro-horror and felt excited about it so I wanted to share it with someone. ---


In this house, things just disappeared. 


When we first arrived here, we chalked it up to the move.


“Have you seen the cast-iron skillet, sweetheart?” my mom asked my dad.


“It’s probably still in a box somewhere.”


Next, we blamed my little brother.


“Mom, I can’t find my trainers anywhere. Have you seen them?” I asked.


“Your brother probably took them.”


Eventually, we ran out of things to blame.


“Darling, have you seen your little brother?”


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Love it. The last sentence brings it home. The question and answer format works so well, lulling the reader in and then the clincher. I might change the word "things" to something else like "people" or some such. A minor point. An enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. 
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Originally posted by Nimhathuna Nimhathuna wrote:

Love it. The last sentence brings it home. The question and answer format works so well, lulling the reader in and then the clincher. I might change the word "things" to something else like "people" or some such. A minor point. An enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. 

Thank you and good point. Since little brother is after all, a person. 
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