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fayestardust
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Posted: 27 Jun 2022 at 11:18am |
Wondering if this is allowed on this forum? I wrote a random micro-horror and felt excited about it so I wanted to share it with someone. --- In this house, things just disappeared. When we first arrived here, we chalked it up to the move. “Have you seen the cast-iron skillet, sweetheart?” my mom asked my dad. “It’s probably still in a box somewhere.” Next, we blamed my little brother. “Mom, I can’t find my trainers anywhere. Have you seen them?” I asked. “Your brother probably took them.” Eventually, we ran out of things to blame. “Darling, have you seen your little brother?” --- |
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Nimhathuna
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Love it. The last sentence brings it home. The question and answer format works so well, lulling the reader in and then the clincher. I might change the word "things" to something else like "people" or some such. A minor point. An enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
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fayestardust
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Thank you and good point. Since little brother is after all, a person.
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