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    Posted: 23 Feb 2019 at 11:48am
Does anyone know if this is acceptable in a spec script, and also how you would write this?

For instance:
BILLY leans down and swipes the boy's bag.

FREEZE FRAME
TITLE - BILLY

Is this the correct way to write it do you think? And also, is it too shooting scripty? One of the judges last time pointed out I included camera angles/editing decisions etc. and shouldn't. Is this just something you can't do in a spec script?
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If adding the title is vital to the story or it's flow, I'd keep it. The freeze frame is a directorial/editorial decision and you'll probably get dinged for it. But, as always, if it furthers the story you can get away with breaking the "rules" a little bit. But yes, ditch ANGLE ON, etc. 
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I agree with J_Fox... unless it's critical to the story, leave things like that out. Titles, freeze frames, superimposed items, split-screens, etc. are directorial decisions. I can cite one example for you. I have a copy of the screenplay for Dude, Where's My Car? If you've seen the film, then you know when we first meet Jesse and Chester, the filmmakers did a freeze on each and inserted their names on the screen. That's not in the script. That was decided on during post production (maybe during production if the director visualized it while he was shooting). The script reads more effectively because your concentration isn't disrupted with a sudden FREEZE FRAME or TITLE. Every time the reader's attention to the main script is broken, the chances of it getting favorable feedback drop. That's been my experience, anyway.
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