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Originally posted by Maximum Dynamite Maximum Dynamite wrote:

Originally posted by GenieAZ GenieAZ wrote:

A beta reader caught me calling the main character by another’s name, after I submitted.  Thankfully, I was able to re-submit!  That was quite a boner!


Oops, that didn't work. Now I've gone and bonered, too. 
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I used 'you know' twice in the same sentence. I'm hopign they think he's just being endearingly awkward.
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Originally posted by ihavenoprocess ihavenoprocess wrote:

I used the word "immense" twice to describe different things. I guess everything in my story will just be "immense" - so frustrating that I can't change it! Might as well have said everything is "yuge."

I think it depends on how close together they are. I try to be careful of that, too, but thousand words could give you enough room that it might not feel repetitive.  
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There are so many ways to mess up a final draft, no doubt. I've been kicking myself all morning after realizing that my attempted simile involving a soccer player taking a dive lacked an important word: "nearly" (being tripped). If the soccer player was actually tripped, falling down would be reasonable. Arg.
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Originally posted by FerretKittyMom FerretKittyMom wrote:

Procrastinated because I didn't like my genre (political satire) so didn't have time for Beta before I submitted it lol
I WISH I had time to show drafts to beta readers. I did once when I did the short story contest, but for flash? The turn-around time just makes the logistics of it difficult. I have a hard time getting beta readers to actually give feedback on anything, let alone on a deadline! I don't know how y'all do it.
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Originally posted by jennifer.quail jennifer.quail wrote:

I used 'you know' twice in the same sentence. I'm hopign they think he's just being endearingly awkward.

I'm sure they will, y'know?
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After a frustrating - and super busy! - day and a half, I scraped my story. The second one I wrote while working and had two hours to give my daughter attention, tighten up the story, add a foreshadowing scene, quick review and submit - with a minute to spare! The second one is a much better story but I didn't revise it much. I described incidental characters but not the supporting characters.   
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Originally posted by Maximum Dynamite Maximum Dynamite wrote:

Originally posted by GenieAZ GenieAZ wrote:

A beta reader caught me calling the main character by another’s name, after I submitted.  Thankfully, I was able to re-submit!  That was quite a boner!


This was in no way, shape, or form an explicit photo, just in case anyone was worried about that...

It was just this silly comic.
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NYCm ninja advice: do not reread your story post-deadline. It will almost certainly make you angsty. I usually wash my hands of it for at least a couple of weeks...
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Originally posted by nod1v1ng nod1v1ng wrote:


NYCm ninja advice: do not reread your story post-deadline. It will almost certainly make you angsty. I usually wash my hands of it for at least a couple of weeks...

Thank you, this is sound advice that I should follow. 
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